Can You Hit a Perfect Pitch? Blogfest Contest! - Cortney Pearson
Blog hop Saturday, January 14, 2012
I LOVE THIS WHOLE BOOK!!!! I could read the whole thing right now ;) Love your writing, Cortney... YOU SERIOUSLY ROCK!
Oh... damn... the story stopped :) I was already hooked! Love both the pitch and the 150. The only word I tripped on was 'decals' and this is only 'cause it's the second time this week I have ht on it, and I have no clue what it means... and now I look like an idiot :)
Very best of luck to you in the contest
Lol, thanks Morgan and Laura!!! So glad you liked it!!!
The pitch is great. Straight to the point, no fluff, I know exactly what the book will be about and it's interesting. I wish I could pull that off with my current MS. LOL! Are you referring to Cypress, CA? I used to live there!
I really enjoyed this, Cortney. I liked the pitch as well. Good luck in the contest.
those are awesome openings! sounds like a great story! and fun blogfest =) good luck!
Great pitch and I enjoyed reading your excerpt. Sounds like a fun story.
I really liked both the pitch and the excerpt! Your MC sounds awesome. Great job and good luck!
I love the voice, but the used-to-be-fake boyfriend thing in the pitch throws me a bit. Sooo she pretended he was a boyfriend at some point and then really ended up dating him, behind everyone's back? It's slightly confusing. You might consider rewording a little. Just my 2 cents. Love it otherwise!
I love the MC's voice--her attitude definitely comes across! :)
Need a Beta-reader? Cuz I wanna read more ;)
Really great! Love the voice you have here and the date is totally something I can relate to. :)
@Crystal, Thanks! And no, it's a made-up town based off where I grew up. Cypress, Idaho, ha ha. :)
@Tracey, @Jolene, @Tara, @T., @Francesca, @Golden Eagle, Thanks everyone!!!
@MBee, Sorry you were thrown a bit. He is actually a boy she pretended was her boyfriend at one point and he happens to be the same boy her friend likes, so she does date him behind her friend's back...so with the short word count I'm alotted, that's about the easiest way to put it. :)
@Cassie, ha ha!! Thanks a bunch, I'd love for you to read it sometime!!
"Real cloth napkins and everything" - hilarious.
The only thing about your pitch is that this part of the sentence "but after dating her used-to-be-fake boyfriend behind her friend's back..." seems to be a little too long. It might be "less is more" in this kind of pitch. See if you can condense that part at all to make it read a little bit more smoothly. (I read your comment and understood what you were going for, but I think it could still use some tightening).
Really great voice! I got a bit confused, too, on the used to be fake boyfriend part. But other than that- the first 150 was terrific!
I like it! I like it lots. =) The only thing that stood out to me as odd was her describing Tyson's hair as blond and 'healthy'. This is either really strange word choice, or a great introduction to MC's eccentricity. =) As for the pitch, maybe include MC's first name, so we know what to call her, and maybe take out 'snarky', because you can get her personality from the first 150 words, and snarky's been done so many times now, it might be an initial turn-off. So, like—"____, an idealistic teenager, blames…". Otherwise, great! Good luck! ^_^
Ooh-oooh-oooH! How did I miss this? Man, I am losing my blogging mind. I love it Cortney! LOVE IT! Very great job, and this is such a fun blogfest! I am wishing you the best of luck!
And - thanks for all the blog comments. Glad you like my new look. I had to track down Janice after she did your blog. Yours is SO CUTE! And that's awesome that you guys are in agriculture too! SO COOL!
@R.A., thanks for the suggestion!
@Janet, sorry you were confused!
@Amanda, yes her describing his hair is definitely her eccentricity! :-p
@Leigh, Lol, thanks!!! :D
Can You Hit a Perfect Pitch? Blogfest Contest! - Cortney Pearson
Blog hop Saturday, January 14, 2012
I LOVE THIS WHOLE BOOK!!!! I could read the whole thing right now ;) Love your writing, Cortney... YOU SERIOUSLY ROCK!
Oh... damn... the story stopped :) I was already hooked! Love both the pitch and the 150. The only word I tripped on was 'decals' and this is only 'cause it's the second time this week I have ht on it, and I have no clue what it means... and now I look like an idiot :)
Very best of luck to you in the contest
Lol, thanks Morgan and Laura!!! So glad you liked it!!!
The pitch is great. Straight to the point, no fluff, I know exactly what the book will be about and it's interesting. I wish I could pull that off with my current MS. LOL! Are you referring to Cypress, CA? I used to live there!
I really enjoyed this, Cortney. I liked the pitch as well. Good luck in the contest.
those are awesome openings! sounds like a great story! and fun blogfest =) good luck!
Great pitch and I enjoyed reading your excerpt. Sounds like a fun story.
I really liked both the pitch and the excerpt! Your MC sounds awesome. Great job and good luck!
I love the voice, but the used-to-be-fake boyfriend thing in the pitch throws me a bit. Sooo she pretended he was a boyfriend at some point and then really ended up dating him, behind everyone's back? It's slightly confusing. You might consider rewording a little. Just my 2 cents. Love it otherwise!
I love the MC's voice--her attitude definitely comes across! :)
Need a Beta-reader? Cuz I wanna read more ;)
Really great! Love the voice you have here and the date is totally something I can relate to. :)
@Crystal, Thanks! And no, it's a made-up town based off where I grew up. Cypress, Idaho, ha ha. :)
@Tracey, @Jolene, @Tara, @T., @Francesca, @Golden Eagle, Thanks everyone!!!
@MBee, Sorry you were thrown a bit. He is actually a boy she pretended was her boyfriend at one point and he hap
pens to be the same boy her friend likes, so she does date him behind her friend's back...so with the short word count I'm alotted, that's about the easiest way to put it. :)
@Cassie, ha ha!! Thanks a bunch, I'd love for you to read it sometime!!
"Real cloth napkins and everything" - hilarious.
The only thing about your pitch is that this part of the sentence "but after dating her used-to-be-fake boyfriend behind her friend's back..." seems to be a little too long. It might be "less is more" in this kind of pitch. See if you can condense that part at all to make it read a little bit more smoothly. (I read your comment and understood what you were going for, but I think it could still use some tightening).
Really great voice! I got a bit confused, too, on the used to be fake boyfriend part. But other than that- the first 150 was terrific!
I like it! I like it lots. =) The only thing that stood out to me as odd was her describing Tyson's hair as blond and 'healthy'. This is either really strange word choice, or a great introduction to MC's eccentricity. =) As for the pitch, maybe include MC's first name, so we know what to call her, and maybe take out 'snarky', because you can get her personality from the first 150 words, and snarky's been done so many times now, it might be an initial turn-off. So, like—"____, an idealistic teenager, blames…". Otherwise, great! Good luck! ^_^
Ooh-oooh-oooH! How did I miss this? Man, I am losing my blogging mind. I love it Cortney! LOVE IT! Very great job, and this is such a fun blogfest! I am wishing you the best of luck!
And - thanks for all the blog comments. Glad you like my new look. I had to track down Janice after she did your blog. Yours is SO CUTE! And that's awesome that you guys are in agriculture too! SO COOL!
@R.A., thanks for the suggestion!
@Janet, sorry you were confused!
@Amanda, yes her describing his hair is definitely her eccentricity! :-p
@Leigh, Lol, thanks!!! :D